文書解析 | 文書是生活體驗官的匯報書

你是否也曾穿上帥氣西裝，頭發梳成大人模樣？也曾仰望偶像，狂奔向他/她的方向？也曾癡迷一種字體，不斷模仿？還是躲在人群，希望和大家一樣？生活太抽象，我想為自己定制一個形象。本文的作者告訴你：不，你不想。

做為一位薩克斯風手，作者在演奏的過程，讓自己的生命得到了表達、延展和綻放。薩克斯風激發了作者對自己多樣性格的認可和對多元生活的反思，促使他去嘗試更多的新鮮事物，充盈自己的頭腦。這才是薩克斯風之于作者的價值所在，這才是每份生活體驗的意義所在。閱讀本文，你會看到一位盡情生活、拼命體驗的年輕人。他刷新學科定位，打破生活邊界。其“跨界”與“融合”的生活方式，也為周圍的人和事帶來積極的影響。

生活有多少可能性？這取決于我們自己。欣賞一幅畫、聽一支曲子、看一部電影，很多人習慣先問它們會產生多少價值，今天讓我們和作者一起做一次“生活的體驗官”，領略它們有多美。

And on that Note

By CURTIS (admitted by Johns Hopkins University)

The sound was loud and discordant, like a hurricane, high notes and low notes mixing together in an audible mess. It was as if a thousand booming foghorns were in a shouting match with sirens. Unlike me, this was a little abrasive and loud. I liked it. It was completely unexpected and extremely fun to play.

Some instruments are built to make multiple notes, like a piano. A saxophone on the other hand doesn’t play chords but single notes through one vibrating reed. However, I discovered that you can play multiple notes simultaneously on the saxophone. While practicing a concert D-flat scale, I messed up a fingering for a low B-flat, and my instrument produced a strange noise with two notes. My band teacher got very excited and exclaimed, “Hey, you just played a polyphonic note!” I like it when accidents lead to discovering new ideas.

I like this polyphonic sound because it reminds me of myself: many things at once. You assume one thing and get another. At school, I am a course scholar in English, but I am also able to amuse others when I come up with wince evoking puns. My math and science teachers expect me to go into engineering, but I’m more excited about making films. Discussing current events with my friends is fun, but I also like to share with them my secrets to cooking a good scotch egg. Even though my last name gives them a hint, the Asian students at our school don’t believe that I’m half Japanese. Meanwhile the non-Asians are surprised that I’m also part Welsh. I feel comfortable being unique or thinking differently. As a Student Ambassador this enables me to help freshman and others who are new to our school feel welcome and accepted. I help the new students know that it’s okay to be themselves.

There is added value in mixing things together. I realized this when my brother and I won an international Kavli Science Foundation contest where we explained the math behind the Pixar movie “Up”. Using stop motion animation we explored the plausibility and science behind lifting a house with helium balloons. I like offering a new view and expanding the way people see things. In many of my videos I combine art with education. I want to continue making films that not only entertain, but also make you think.

A lot of people have a single passion that defines them or have a natural talent for something specific. Like my saxophone I am an instrument, but I can play many notes at once. I’m a scholar and a musician. Quiet but talkative. An athlete and a filmmaker. Careful but spontaneous. A fan of Johnny Cash and Kill The Noise. Hard working but playful. A martial artist and a baker. One of a kind but an identical twin.

Will polyphonic notes resonate in college? Yes. For instance, balancing a creative narrative with scientific facts will make a more believable story. I want to bring together different kinds of students (such as music, film, and English majors) to create more meaningful art. Understanding fellow students’ perspective, talents, and ideas are what build a great community.

I’m looking forward to discovering my place in the world by combining various interests. Who I am doesn’t always harmonize and may seem like nothing but noise to some. But what I play, no matter how discordant, can be beautiful. It’s my own unique polyphonic note.

1. abrasive /??bre?s?v/ adj.粗糙的；有研磨作用的；傷人感情的；（聲音）刺耳的，難聽的

2. siren  /?sa?r?n/ n. 汽笛；迷人的女人；歌聲動人的女歌手；adj. 迷人的；vi. 響著警報器行駛；vt. 引誘

3. foghorn /?fɑ?ɡh??rn/ n.霧角；響而尖的聲音；迷失

4. reed /ri?d/ n. [作物] 蘆葦；簧片；牧笛；不可依靠的人；vt. 用蘆葦蓋；用蘆葦裝飾

5. polyphonic /?pɑ?li?fɑ?n?k/ adj. 多音的；有韻律變化的；對位法的

6. plausibility /?pl??z??b?l?ti/ n. 善辯；似乎有理；貌似可信

7. Helium /?hi?li?m/n. [化學] 氦 (符號為He，2號元素)

1. “The sound was loud and discordant, like a hurricane, high notes and low notes mixing together in an audible mess. ”

“like a hurricane”, 比喻，使不可見的聲音有了具體的形象。要想實現畫面感，除了形容詞，恰當的修辭，特別是比喻和暗喻，效果更加顯著。

2.“Some instruments are built to make multiple notes, like a piano. A saxophone on the other hand doesn’t play chords but single notes through one vibrating reed. However, I discovered that you can play multiple notes simultaneously on the saxophone. ”

本句先陳述一般認識，薩克斯風與其他樂器相比，差異是什么。再轉折，從自身經驗，為薩克斯風的屬性重新定義。這一段寥寥數語，卻是全方位、多功能：

首先，作者以自己的方式解讀薩克斯風，連同前一段對薩克斯風演奏狀態的描繪，都是盡到了“生活體驗官”的本分。文書寫任何的興趣愛好，都要有證據證明，你是這方面的“專家”。是以相關榮譽為證么？不，思想才是最好的證明。

第二、本段點明主旨，后文每一段都有相關的句子與“play multiple notes simutaneously”相呼應，形成本篇文書的一條隱線。

第三、本段承上啟下。從首段演奏狀態過度到生活其他方面的探索。

看似最普通的一段，實則奠定文章基調和行文走勢，贊！

3.While practicing a concert D-flat scale, I messed up a fingering for a low B-flat, and my instrument produced a strange noise with two notes. My band teacher got very excited and exclaimed, “Hey, you just played a polyphonic note!” I like it when accidents lead to discovering new ideas.

生活化的細節支撐，可讀性強。呈現重要的隨機性事件，以印證自己的觀點，作者再次證明自己是一名優秀的“體驗官”。

4.“many things at once. You assume one thing and get another.” 和“There is added value in mixing things together.”

第二條解析中提到的“隱線”來了。處處不忘回扣主旨，使文章整體性沒有被零散的事例打破。如果你也想采用這樣的寫法，展現自己的多元生活和豐富體驗，千萬要注意緊扣主旨。

5.The Asian students at our school don’t believe that I’m half Japanese. Meanwhile the non-Asians are surprised that I’m also part Welsh.

此句略顯突兀，“體驗官”此處失職，除點明多元身份外，后續應有一兩句細節佐證自己在不同文化中毫無違和感，會更加流暢。

6.“I help the new students know that it’s okay to be themselves.”和“I like offering a new view and expanding the way people see things.

上價值！“體驗官”的職責當然是傳播好的生活理念。文書的大部分篇幅是描寫自己的成長，但是招生如同招聘，大學要錄取的不是獨自綻放、孤芳自賞的一枝獨秀，而是暈染滿園的爬山虎。所以，要記得讓你的文書飛起。

7.I realized this when my brother and I won an international Kavli Science Foundation contest where we explained the math behind the Pixar movie “Up”.

細節到位，才配做“首席體驗官”。一些學生在描述自己過往人生的時候，從記事起，短短十余年時光，卻已往事隨風，往事如煙。很多人描述和作者一樣的contest, 可能也只記得是an international Kavli Science Foundation contest, 再追文細節，便是翻找郵箱里的賽事流程。其實文書的準備工作，遠遠早于申請遞交前的幾個月。所以，找回自己的枝枝蔓蔓吧，愿申請季到來時，你已枝繁葉茂。

8.Will polyphonic notes resonate in college? Yes. For instance, balancing a creative narrative with scientific facts will make a more believable story.

有始有終，始于音樂，終于音樂。首尾呼應的同時，這里的“polyphonic notes”已然是一個暗喻。作者能為大學帶去的又何止是音樂？

9.I want to bring together different kinds of students (such as music, film, and English majors) to create more meaningful art. Understanding fellow students’ perspective, talents, and ideas are what build a great community.

文書沒有固定的格式，文書末尾喊話大學不是所有文書的必要格式。但是一位思想跳脫、熱情奔放的“體驗官”向你“營銷”自己，這誰能挺得??？